If you want to upgrade additionally, we will configure the network for your staffs to upgrade the Main IRD remotely.
Are you okay next Monday?
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2022-01-14 15:39:03
If you want to upgrade additionally, we will configure the network for your staffs to upgrade the Main IRD remotely.
Are you okay next Monday?
If you want to upgrade additionally, we will configure the network for your staffs to upgrade the Main IRD remotely.
사업적인 공문서(제안서)에 쓰인 내용이라 조심스럽지만...
일단은 맨 처음 if절에 목적어가 빠져있어 보입니다.
아마 주절의.the main IRD 이지 않을까 싶고요.
그럼 주절에 같은 표현이 중복되니
그 부분을 따로 손을 보심 더 매끄러울